19/3

A rainy night IN New York

      When the figures eraced he saw a map and a plan.  By the  calligraphy  he noticed that it was  someone that works at a jewellery.  When he went to the  jewellery, he saw that person   (WHO?) robing the jewelry, with other persons.  He rconoced himcouse of the eyes.  The next day EddyWHO? went to the jewellery and he said to the manager who was the rober , but nobody trusted him.  Eddy toke the stuff were the script was done, at the back of M & M world(REWRITE).  Everybody said that it could have been any person.  Eddy looked up and found a camara.  In the video it showed all the staff members. They made a judgement and Eddy gave $1000000000000 to the judge, also he would say that they were guilty.  His name was Zack.  All the staff said that they would have arevenge.  Eddy fought that it would be impocible, couse they would take them to the jail of Mexico that is one of the most advance of all the world, but they made it thanks for a folce fire alarm because someboby was smoaking. That gaved them enought time to scape.  Inmediatly they went were Eddy lived, they broke the door and they saw a figure and shot, but it was just the cat and they kill the cat.  Sudenlly Eddy etered and kicked at the back and killed all exept for one.  They took him to reavilitation at St.Oswald and he became a teacher, he wasnt really revalidated.  His surname was Cheesspot.    

AGUSTIN. IT'S SHORT. RE READ IT AND RE WRITE IT IN A CLEARER WAY TRYING TO EXPAND YOUR IDEAS AND MENTIONING WHO YOU ARE REFERRING TO. I KNOW YOU CAN DO IT. GIVE IT A TRY AND GO FOR MORE! 30/03- MISS ALE

17/04 PITY VERY LITTLE HAS  BEEN DONE FOR THE LAST 15 DAYS!! THE ENDING IS NOT VERY CLEAR- YOU NEED TO CORRECT MISTAKES AND CLARIFY IDEAS!