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A rainy night in New York
Eddie was in the middle of the night he didn´t KNOW where he was. He was confused by the mystery he had always wished to investigate. He was scared´, he was in the middle of nowhere. He didn´t have a map nor a compass, in a word he had nothing to know where he was. It was a mystery. There were no people in the streets but there was a lot of lights as if you were in Broadway. He shouted ´is anyone here? There were no answers, there wasn´t a single flea. He scared in the middle of the rain, in the streets.NOT VERY CLEAR He felt something it was like a shout he heard it agan it was a girl crying because she was lost. Eddie ran to her what´s happenig why are you crying someone killed my family. Do you where the criminal went, the poor girl didn´t understand a single word of what Eddie was saying. He asked whats your name? she answered in a sad voice my name is Merrissa. He asked another question do you live alone?she answered no I live with a friiend shes called Emily and wit her older sister Sharon he was happy to hear someone talk to him. Eddie went to look for Emily and Sharon with Merrissa they lived in a department in central park and 5th avenue it was a department wfere they lived it was nice.The girls said in what can we help you he answered well i´m solving a mystery of the disapeering of people. Well help you said the girls went to look with him in the rainy streets. The girls saw something in a alley a shadow of a person hiding, suddenly they saw all the walls painted with blood the little girls were scared he said go the department and bring all you think is necesary but you Emily with me we are going to do some investigating with the magnifing glass and you stay with me because you are the one who best sees in the family. You also have good senses as you are the most little one you have better and newr the 5 senses. And you are the one racts faster. Lets see whats behind thes wall by the time they finished talking they the other girls came with ssome long ropes, BB shotguns guns rifles and gasoline and some mathes thin ropes and some flash lights.They were very scared they said if anything happens will call from the woky talkies. The groups were divided into Eddie and Merrissa, and Sharon and Emily.Eddie went behind someone and kicked his but amd then saw 2 more men behind killed them with the ropes the group of Sharon went fine because there wasn´t anyone in there way then meat in a place by 2 tunnels Eddie said Sharon take out your BBshotgun and you two little ones take out the two BBguns you have each. When they finally got to a plce were most of the people were Marrissa said mom dad your alive we thought you were dead you have to see how my new friend kicked these criminals ass. When they finally got home they said to Eddie for saving those peoples life you can and live with us he said ok. But he said theirs one thing I still have to do is go the police and examine with them if their are more people mssing. When he got to the police he said officer you have to give this girles some meddals because of their good work they helped me get and kill the criminals. And to let them if they want be police because they know how to manage a BBgun and a BBshotgun and these two little ones to know ho to use a gun. The police said well I apresheat it but I might not let them be police women they will be the chief of the police. aAnd you Mr Eddie will be detective and mayor of the city. And in honor you will be a police man that will give us the guns we like to solve mysterys. We hope we meat again and to solve a mystery.
FELIPE. THIS STORY SEEMS TO BE VERY MYSTERIOUS BUT YOU HAVE OMMITTED TO WRITE SPEECH MARKS FOR DIALOGUE, PUNCTUATION AND PARAGRAPHS. PLEASE DO SO. THEN I WILL FINISH CORRECTING IT. THANK YOU MISS ALE APRIL 15TH
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