The Precious Jewel

It was cold and snowy when I went to school the next day. I was suspicious of everyone. Who could I trust? Nobody, I had to keep it as a secret.  At school people talked about the robbery.  I was so nervous so I started trembling, and people started being suspicious about me about the robbery, but I said it was only that my cat was at the laundry and I had forgotten it so people understood and kept on talking. 

When  I came back from school I searched on internet for a place where police could keep stolen things.  At first nothing appeared, but a little while later like a little link appeared at the top of the page.  I tried to enter  but it had an invite key, I spent hours trying to find out which  the password was, suddenly a little clue appeared,  "a Great place".  I thought and thought and nothing came to my head.  After a while I thought of a museum, I tried all museums WHICH WERE nearby, and  the last museum I entered was called "PROTECTIVES" It  was in a small town near New York, it was a long trip but I was determinated to go and get my jewel back. 

After six  hours of train I arrived to New York.  There I called a taxi WHICH drove me to the "PROTECTIVES" museum WHERE I entered through a big stair case into a big hall, there I had to find out where that mysterious room was, without being suspected.  I got a little map about the museum and tried to look for the room, obviously it wasn't there so I went outside and looked at the shape of the museum.  The map of the museum showed each room of the museum.  The map of the museum had a shape of "C", but realy the museum had a shape of a square, so there could be the place .

After some minutes of thinking which way to go, I went through some secret doors. A door had a padlock, I didn't have anything to break it with so I looked for the code number.  It was in an office, in a little drawer.  So I opened the door and there were lots of stolen things without much value but mine was in a little corner under a special protection, it was the most valuable piece in all the room.  I got it but suddenly an alarm started ringing, so I hurried up through the ventilation pipes and finished on the roof.  There I climbed down the stairs and appeared AT the back of the museum WHERE I ran and ran to a little street.  There I relaxed and went walking normaly till the bus station and finally arrived back home with the"PRECIOUS JEWEL".

GOOD MYSTERY STORY!!! CHECK YOUR SPELLING MISTAKES- MISS ALE

A VERY GOOD STORY!!! MISS ALE 17/4

Lost in time

(invent your title and ending)

John didn't know where he was. He looked out of the window, but nothing seemed familiar. The room was strange too. He didn't recognise any of the furniture. And his clothes, although they were a good fit, surely didn't belong to him? He'd never had a yellow shirt. Or a brown check jacket. 

As he sat on the padded wooden stool trying to puzzle out answers to all these questions, he slowly became aware of something in the back pocket of his trousers.Something hard. He put his hand in his pocket and pulled it out.

It was a very hard wooden old piece.  It looked like possesd, he was thinking ABOUT how IT HAD COME this room.  He only remembered that he was dizzy and with a stomach acHe and after that he didn't know ANYTHING at all.  He went out of the room, he was in an abandoned building, a very old style building, he went outside and startED looking at the newspaper, it said March 19th and year 1996.  John was puzzled, he didn't know how he HAD COME TO 1996.  John started looking at THIS old wooden piece. It was shining and there he saw a very strange figure. It was a frog with lots of dates on the sides.  John thoughT this could be A transporter of time, and actually it was.  John didnt know how to use the transporter so he went to magician'S places and libraries, but he didn't get what he wanted. 

The next day he had a new flashback, he remembered that a stranger had given him the old piece of wood as A present FOR charity.  The next day he remembered what words the stranger had used.  The stranger said "I concede this young man to travel 12 years back".  So John did it, but it didn't work. 

The next day John remembered that the stranger said "please my lord".  So John did it...  He appeared in an old wooden room, just as the one he HAD BEEN 12 years ago, only that it looked much more modern, it was obvious, it was 2008.  So he went to the street it was all normal, so he touched his pocket anD the old wooden wasn´t there, he looked all over  but it had gone.  He went to the police to tell them what happened, but they laughed, and all people did, so he only knew what had happened, and he will be the only one TO know.

GOOD WORK LUIS! CAREFUL WITH YOUR PAST TENSES!! AND SPELLING!

wHAT'S THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN "KNEW" AND "NEW"?

mISS ALE

MUCH BETTER NOW!!! GOOD TO SEE THAT YOU HAVE GONE OVER YOUR CORRECTIONS!!! MISS ALE 17/04