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The Gold Coins
When it's time to go home you see a big photo poster of a place called Margaret, it had enormous and dark blue seas. And on top it had a big word written that said "David" and beside it, it said "gold" so you decide to find out, what it was about.
When you arrive home, you remember about the paper which was on the store beside the unbreakable jar wich was in perfect condition so you decide to phone detective Lancy. You talk to her and tell her about everything hapeened on Claire’s house and she decides to start investigating with you.
The next morning with lots of energy you have breakfast and your mummy tells you that you recieved a phone call the night before from Claire and she asked you to phone her. When you hear this you get pretty shocked. Why would Claire phone you at night?
After thinking for a while it was too late so you rush to the toilet, brush your teeth, look for your lunch and run to the bus stop. On the bus you ses Claire sitting on one of the last seats waving her hand and shouting through the window, looking at you. In that moment, you aren’t pretty sure what to do. You take courage and sit on the bus beside Claire,you ask her why she had phoned you. Claire says she never phoned you, in fact it was also too late but she still had something to tell to you. She wanted to wait until that afternoon. When you get to school Claire goes right into Mrs.Lancy’s office, Mrs.Kelly was Mr.Terry’s girlfriend and she really wanted the coin, Mrs.Kelly was really suspicious.
After a while you decide to enter your Maths class and totally ignore Claire. In class, Claire looks really tired. She never performed in class nor answered any of the teacher's questions. You prefer not to get involved in other’s buisness so after lunch, when school finishes you run home not to see Claire on the bus.
When you arrive home you phone Detective Lancy and both decide to go together to Claire’s house. When you arrive to Claire’s house you both see Mrs.Kelly and Claire reading books in a long sofa. Suddenly Mr.Chris, who was Mr.Terry's assistant appears. He was in the kitchen preparing some tea. The reaction of Claire was pretty noisy, she started shouting to both of you telling you to go home because she was having a meeting with some friends. You run out of her house with Lancy and you start spying them while they talked and drank a purple tea. They felt really uneasy after seeing you and Lancy.
It was getting dark and you decide to go to Lancy’s house to investigate, you and Lancy are pretty sure that Mr.Chris, Mrs.Kelly and Claire were planning and the four of them had robbed the coin. So you decide to tell Mr.Terry everything. When you get to the coin store you and Lancy talk to Mr.Terry, after listening to the story his face looked really confussed. He tells you and Lancy that her girfliend and Mr.Chris where going to Margaret, an old city in Australia on a business trip. When you hear this you say thanks to Mr.Terry, grab Lancy’s arm and run home. At home you go to the computer and investigate about Margaret, you see a posted biography which was posted by somebody twelve hours before, it says about an abandoned place where the most famous archeologist of the world called David is looking for gold and he would offer lots of money for anybody who gave gold to him.
You and Lancy suspect ABOUT something. You know THAT this group of chiefs are going to Margaret and they are going to give the gold coin in exchange of millions of dollars, what should you do? You think you must stop them, Lancy isn’t sure about yor plan but you convince her.
When you get home you talk to your mum, she is very sure everything is going to work FINE so she trusts you and the next morning you are on Lancy’s car driving to Margaret. The trip lasted a few hours by car. Lancy is twenty-seven years old, she is much more older than you and that is one of the reasons you really trust her and you are really sure everything was going to work all right.
Four hours later you get to Magaret, you stop on a new fashioned hotel in the center of Australia. When you get to your hotel room, you decide to watch some television. You get pretty shocked when you hear about Claire on the NEWS night show. The NEWS shows Claire In a ceremony at the yellow house, where the president lives. It tells about the archeologist and about some gold, you couldn´t hear more. Lancy was in the toilet, SO WHEN SHE COMES BACK you tell her everything. You run to the parking lot with her and you quickly jump inside Lancy’s car. She knew every single street, in fact she had been studying them DURING the night before they travelled to Margaret so in a wink of an eye they were already in the ceremony. When they see Claire they quickly bend down and hide behind the bushes. Lancy takes out all their record information about the case and she runs in front of the speech table. Everybody looks at her, Lancy reads all her documents and Claire’s face changed expresion. When David hears this he looks awsome, Claire steps infront of Lancy and tells everyone she hadn’t been the only one who had BEEN involved In the robbery. Lancy steps foward and shows the photos of Mr.Chris and Mrs.Kelly, they appear from behind and both tell everything. After all the discussion, David stands up and shows his police badge. He made everything up; he didn’t know about you and Lancy but he knew about Claire, Mr.Chris and Mrs.Kelly. He wasn’t an archeologist, he was friend of the Australian president and he had made all this up in the yellow house because he knew the news would spread around and many people WOULD KNOW about this. He wanted every single agent to know about this case. He published an invented biography on Margaret in CASE he knew it was a very old uncivilized city and it hadn’t any biography published. His plan worked and that day Claire, Mrs and Mr were arrested. Claire was toO young but she had escaped from an orphanage TEN years ago and they had been looking for her, so they took her there again.
The case was solved you and Lancy go home, as you predicted, the way back home was much shortER. David visits you and Lancy and they give back the golden coin to Mr.Terry, he was very happy having his coin back and also very happy not to live ANY LONGER with such a thief and liar. This time he donated the coin to a very important museum In Australia in commemoration to his friends who helped him UNDERGO a very tough time. You, Lancy and David became good friends and they worked out many detectives work(NOT VERY CLEAR). You and your Mum made many investigation trips and both had lots of fun while being together in every different case with Lancy and David who now became very good friends of you. This was the story of a young girl who bacome an excellent detective throughought the world and helped every single girl and boy that wanted to make a change for humanity and help people who wanted to investigate and express their ideas FREELY TO others.
MAIA: CONGRATULATIONS!!! A VERY LONG AND WELL THOUGHT STORY! RE READ IT AND CORRECT THE MISTAKES! YOU GET 2 HOUSE POINTS!30/03 MISS ALE
The End.
Future and Life
John didn't know where he was. He looked out of the window, but nothing seemed familiar. The room was strange too. He didn't recognize any of the furniture. And his clothes, although they were a good fit, surely didn't belong to him? He'd never had a yellow shirt. Or a brown check jacket.
As he sat on the padded wooden stool trying to puzzle out answers to all these questions, he slowly became aware of something in the back pocket of his trousers. Something hard. He put his hand in his pocket and pulled it out, it was a golden peace of wood. He didn’t really knew what it was, the last thing he remembered was the face of his brother Ben and a strange image of a garden.
Well, after all the only thing he could do was to investigate. When he opened the door he saw a man dressed in black and a lady dressed in pink. He was in New York. Well, he always lived there but he didn’t actually remember anything. Everything was so new for him. He went to a garden nearby and stopped In an enormous candy shop and ate a huge lollipop, he paid with a piece of the golden wood he had in his pocket. The lollipop had something written AT the top, a big symbol and beside it the word candy. It was really interesting in fact he had already seen that symbol. He kept on walking until he found a big house which stood in front of him and a big board that said "Knock ON the door". He entered the house and a lady talked to him. THERE WAS ALSO a boy and a man. They started talking and talking, his mind was in white and never heard a word. When they stopped, they expected John to say something. Those people looked exactly as HIS family. Astonished he looked at them with a big look and discovered that they were HIS family but much older. Everything was changed so he decided to start doing his common life and ran to his room.
The next morning when he woke up he was In his room. It was the only corner of the house which REMAINED exactly as if it was before. He decided to investigate the house and looked in every single room at home, everything was so changed. He went to the toilet and looked himself at the mirror for a long time. He had a beard and was old and tall. After a while of observing his body he understood that all night and day he HAD BEEN just thinking on the others and could never think ABOUT him. John was hungry, he went to the kitchen. When he was walking through the stairs he saw a garden. The same garden he had seen when he woke up the first time. He passed on, went to the kitchen, drank orange juice. He quickly ran to the place he had been the day before, he guided himself because of the garden and the huge candy shop he had visited. Also because of the black dressed man and the pink dressed woman who were still there. He entered the strange house and it was still empty and lonely, he entered the room he had woken up and dressed up with the clothes that were still there. The clothes at home were very old and dusty.
He investigated the house and there was only a long corridor and this room was filled up with plenty of furniture. When he passed through the door once again, the black dressed man was gone. John decided to talk to the woman and he asked her what had been happening. This woman said three words, "garden, brother, tree" and then she ran away.
John entered the candy shop and this time ate a small milk chocolate and paid again with another piece of golden wood. After a while he went home and as the lady had told him, he decided to enter his brother's room to talk to him. When he entered the room he saw his brother lying on the floor but still alive. On the table there was a poisoned cookie. He ran to the kitchen where her mother was cooking and when she saw her son, she grabbed him and called his husband with a long and extensive shout. He quickly ran into the kitchen and when he saw her wife and his son in her arms, he quickly grabbed the keys of his car and in five minutes he was in hospital. They took their son to emergency room while John quietly observed evrything with precaution. His mother and father asked John what had happened. John explained everything in detail.
Three hours later the doctor informed his family everything was FINE and that in a few days Ben was going to be BACK at home. It was just a little infection In the stomach and he had to drink six different medicines every nine hours. John asked tthe doctor if he could enter Ben’s room and the doctor nodded. He suggested keeping everything calm so that Ben could relax and get better. When he entered the emergency room he hugged his brother. Ben said sorry and John asked why, his brother's eyes closed and he fell asleep. John passed through the door and before her mother and father entered the room John told them he was alive. Their parents kissed his son and John disappeared.
When he was home he remembered the words of the lady and ran to the garden, he grabbed the golden piece of wood and stood in front of the tree, on the tree there was the word WISH. He closed his eyes, said a few words and disappeared.
Suddenly he appeared again at home in the same garden but much more cheerful and lovely, it was filled up with colorful flowers and he felt much happier. He entered home and everyone was young again. The sun shone and the clouds flew around the sky. His mother, father and brother were home and it was time to eat.
At night he thought and meditated, everything was the future and nothing could be changed. Every single step of life ran with so much magic and coincidence, everything was strange and at the same time confusing, it was just an illusion but every clue and second of life meant something for John.
The End.
CONGRATULATIONS ONCE AGAIN. YOU WORKED REALLY HARD AND YOUR STORIES ARE SUPER!! YOU GOT TWO MORE HOUSE POINTS!!! 30/03 MISS ALE
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