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I am Ashlee I'm 16 and I live in Los Angeles where i have lived there for one year and a half in a big  mansion  like the one Brad Pitt bought. I have a big room like two normal rooms.  My hair is brown but I dyed it blond. I always wear pink dresses and golden shoes.  My favourite food is lobster and salad which is  really tasty and even more when it has a strange sauce. I am a little bit talkative and I'm not very organized. I love to dance and sing. I love rings and strange things but one day I got the most impressive ring of all but It disappeared.  This is the story of the mysterious ring.

  A year ago my big sister Molly who was 30 years old moved to a new house (BE MORE CLEAR. WHAT DO YOU MEAN). She did a party and my mother gave everybody a job. She would do the decoracions and I was in charge of the dress and  the present so she gave me a credit card and    tHought that it was nothing better than a trip to Paris but then I thought she was moving so she would like to stay in her home so I asked my mother and she said it was a good idea to buy her a dress with a jEwel so I went to the best dressmaker in Los Angeles , she told me she would make the most beautiful dress i had saw in my life.

I decided to start walking along the streets when I found Tiffany & co. I saw beautifull things made of silver or gold.  I saw necklaces, long bracelets and beautifull diamonds .  Then I saw the most beutiful ring in the world; it had a diamont incrusted in the middle and some very little letters in the white gold which were really strange. I asked what they were and a girl told me nobody  could ever decipher them a magician named Selena Loop. it had been her wedding ring, but when she married in the party she dispaeard and the only thing we know is that she was never foud they say theres a spell on it. It has been preserved for 300 years and it's been here  for 50 years and it could make you dissapear in your wedding .(too long, punctuation? make ideas clear!)  I took it, because I love this kind of things, for  my sister I bought  a golden braclet.  Then I went to look for the dress the  modist was right it was the most beutiful dress in the world It was  white with a silver  sring in the middle.   Then I took it home ,nobody was there so I left the dress and went.  I told my friend Minsi about it i think she wasn't paying of attention she was more a material girl.  Minsi is my best friend for ever in the whole world she had black hair and black eyes. Then I drank something the next thing I remember I fainted when I woke up I was disy I looked in my poket the ring had gone.  What had happened ? Who could it be?  Minsi? The spirit of the magician? It was a mistery.CHECK, THIS PIECE OF WORK WAS FINISHED IN A HURRY!YOU STARTED OFF VERY WELL BUT... WHAT HAPPENED??

MISS ALE APRIL 16TH

MILI GOOD TO SEE THAT YOU HAVE WORKED HARD! I'LL CHECK IT NOW! MISS ALE 10/04