Then after that I went to go tell Mr. Terry about that claire didnt have a jar with any scratches. Mr. Terry thought about who could it be or who else wanted the golden coin so bad but he couldnt think of anybody. The next day I went to the store and saw Mr. Terry sitting beside the jar. He looked and looked at the jar, and at an instant a smile appeared in his face so I asked him why, he told me that the unbreakable jar had the company name at the bottom and that this one didnt so they ran to claires house. When she oppened the door she looked very shoked because she didnt think that she would se me that fast again but a big smile appeared in her face. She asked me what had brought me to her hose and I said that I wanted to see her jar collection again. When I got to the room I checked every jar if it had the company name but no one did. after when I and Mr Terry were about to leave I asked her if she knew someone who sells jars and she said that there was a little city in Mexico that selled lots of jars.

The next morning we packed our things to go to Mexico and whent to the airport. When we arrived in mexico we rent a car and headed to the city. The road was very dark and isolated, we thought that we wer lost but after a little wile we saw some lights and it was the town. We parked the car and ran out. We asked some people for a jar seller but they didnt understand english. We asked more but no one understood us, then when we were about to give up but we heard two people speaking english and we ran to him and asked him and told us were th shop was so when we got there we saw the jar and asked him from were he got it, he looked very nervous he didnt know what to say. Then we looked at the jar carefully and we saw that the gold coin was inside. We brought him to the police he asked him questions and admited that he had hired claire to get the coin. So then we went with the seller and the police to the city were the robery was and arrested claire so both went to jail and Mr Terry bought the coin and gave it to his wife.

TIZIAN IS THIS STORY FINISHED???? VERY LITTLE COMMITMENT SHOWN TOWARDS YOUR WORK! MISS ALE 10/04

TIZIAN NOTHING HAS BEEN DONE TO IMPROVE YOUR WORK!- WHAT YOU HAVE WRITEN HAS NO RELATIONSHIP WITH THE BEGINNING OF THE STORY I GAVE YOU. REMEMBER TO INCLUDE PUCTUATION, CHECK YOUR SPELLING, AND MAKE IT LONGER SO THAT AT LEAST YOU CAN HAVE 3 SHORT PARAGRAPHS!!! - MISS ALE APRIL 16TH