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Invent the title and finish the story

 

TITLE: John and the strange diamond

 

 

He pulled out a heavy diamond and examined it and he started to notice that he was becoming Unconscious so he dropped it to the floor.  He thought that diamond was like magic.  Then he got it again but he did not feel anything, in some seconds he was unconscious on the floor.  When he woke up, he did not know where he was again so he got the diamond but he tried not to loose his conscience, so he could see what happened.  He knew that he would not keep awake so he got a video camara and put it on record mode so when he fell on the floor he could record all that happened when he was unconscious.  When he woke up he stopped the camera, he rewound the camera and saw that from the diamond a man that was thin and  with blond hair came out and took him and his things in an car made of glass to another place and that the man changed John's clothes and then he threw John a cup of water and then disapeared.  When John saw that, he stood up and noticed that he was in his room sleeping and that it had all been a dream.  After noticing that it was a dream he started to ask himself why he had had that dream.  So he started to think but he did not find out.  Some months later he was walking along  Libertador Avenue when he saw a jewlery, so he entered it, he was watching some necklaces and some watches and he noticed that in a counter there was a diamond that was the same one that he had seen in the dream so he went out of the jewlery to his house.  When he got to his house he phoned a detective so that he could solve why he had had that dream and why that diamond was there.  He called a detective called Dymytry, he was tall, stocky and very quiet. Dymytry was very famous because of his investigating system.  He started to work on my case.  He worked and worked for several weeks.  After working a lot he came to me one day.  He came to me with one very important advise.  He had discovered that the situation that I had had was real and that a man called Kioshy had that diamond that made you inconscious and when you were a sleep he planned to kill you with a curved knife.  So when I heard that I knew that Kioshy had been taking me to different places and then to my house and he put the diamond between my hands and then sell the diamond so that I could not suspect.   

THE END!!!!

 

TOMMY! GOOD BUT I'M SURE YOUR IDEAS COULD BE EXPANDED SO AS TO MAKE THE STORY RICHER!!! RE READ AND CHECK YOUR MISTAKES! 30/03 MISS ALE

 

GOOD TOMMY! WHAT ABOUT THE PARAGRAPHS? MISS ALE- 17/04

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