A rainy day in New York

   It was 10:00 clock in the morning and I was in my house watching the news on  TV when I heard a crash.  I rushed to the door and didn't see anything so I said to myself " I am going to go for a walk" so I went to my room and changed my clothes and left for my walk.  After a while I found a puddle of red paint so I got a bottle that somebodyhad thrown there so I got it and put a little bit of the red paint that was there so I walked a little bit more to see I would find something strange until I came with a stick that had the same red paint as I had saw so I got it and walked a little bit more until I found nothing else so I returned home and started to investigate and take-up notes of the things I got.(A VERY LONG SENTENCE, WHICH MAKES IT UNCLEAR. WRITE SHORTER SENTENCES AND MAKE IDEAS CLEARER)  All of a sudden a storm came, but, I was confused becase a second befor it was a very sunny day but now there was a storm!!!!   I wrote in my notebook the noise of the car crash, the red paint, the stick with the red paint and the storm. 

The next day the storm started again!  I was tired of these storms because I wanted to go outside and tell the sky to stop raining but suddenly something hit me on the back of my head I fell down unconshious.  After a long time I suspected that it didnt rain anymore so I opened my eyes but I was on the road all soaked so I got up and hurried  home.  I  changed my clothes and went out of my house.  That's why I am here trying to relax myself.

   The next day I went out of my house because I heard more rain.  I said to myself I want to die!!!!!!!!  So I got a knife but suddenly I heard giggles outside and  I didnt hear any more rain so I placed the knife on the table and went outside and there were to heads sticking out on my roof and some more giggles, I couldnt see exactly who they were  so I called the police.  After a while the police came and I told them what I had seen. The police climbed on my roof and saw 4 teenagers with a bottle of red paint and a stick, so the police told me to go up and see what happened and I saw the 4 teenagers that made a hole in my roof with the same bottle that had the red paint that I had got and the same stick with the same red paint that I got and I also saw a bucket with water and some sleeping bags.(A VERY LONG SENTENCE. MAKE IDEAS CLEARER)  So I solved the mistery of the rain!  I was so happy I HAD solved the mistery, and the teenagers never came again to my house because the police called their mothers and their mothers said they were going to fix the hole in the roof and begged him sorry, and the 4 teenagers were punished by their mothers and the mystery was solved and everyone lived happily ever after!(CHOOSE ANOTHER ENDING MORE APPROPRITE FOR Y 6)

YOU NEED TO FINISH IT! MISS ALE 6/04

Valentina, What happened? Tomorrow is the due date and the story is not finished!!! Miss Ale 10/04

13/4 VALEN, IT'S 9.00 PM AND YOU HAVEN'T FINISHED YOUR STORY! WHAT A PITY! Miss Ale

17/04 VALENTINA YOU NEED TO RE CONSIDER SOME PARTS AND RE WRITE THEM- PLESA WRITE NUMBER IN WORDS. CHANGE THE ENDING. MISS ALE

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